Honestly

Critic January 13, 2017 6:30 am

It feels like the characters are talking independently of each other.
i.e: "Whats your name?"
Response: In the grand scheme of things, he's a great dancer and he's a great painter and I'll keep repeating that until you wonder if you're the one who's confused for no reason.

There's no flow. Overall, it's frustratingly confusing.

Responses
    flornica January 13, 2017 9:25 am

    Exactly. It comes off like a word theatrical play