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So I left this to marinate in my want to read list as one does, and I already dislike the beginning of the story. Yeah, what a coincidence the anonymous dude you listen to works as a waiter at the party you attend as an actor superstar... Oh and look, he also kissed you and dared you to get your dick up lol.
I know stuff like this happens (when the stars align just right), but the plot and the meeting of the protagonists seems so artificial and forced, especially the fact Yujin just fucks a celeb out in the open in the bathroom, not even trying to hide in a stall, and Aaron is like yup, the mole behind the ear, this is my guy. C'mon, so lazy. No build up, not even laying out the plot for them to meet up in like the first three chapters or so. It reads as a porn plot, and I know, from the pictures I've seen, it's the ultimate goon material, but at least when you write 50+ chapters as an author, you're trying to say something, to build some story... Not use the story as canvas to draw men fucking. For this, there's one shot or short goon stories with no more than 5 chapters. Or don't try and pretend to write plot, just make em fuck and don't bother with the back stories and attempting any depth lmao