gojosblindfold
: okay i few points i find that kinda irks me even tho the story is kinda interesting
1. i get that she’s the mc and she’s starting to change the dynamics of the family but like as a reader this is feels like she’s a character with a lot of plot armour. like i don’t think it would’ve been bad to make her lose any of the “duels” bc i honestly think it could’ve added to the story
2. the cover of the story made it seem like her dad would be more relevant but most of the story especially at the start really revolves around her relationship with her grandfather. which don’t get me wrong that makes sense but like at the start the only time we really see her dad is when he brought her in. more over the start felt so rushed like tell me more about the dead son. show me more of their relationship building.
i think the story itself is like okay… like don’t get me wrong i’ve read a lot of story’s where the mc is like invincible or whatever and furthermore she’s just a kid but it js feels like there’s plot holes and the more i read the more like stupid it feels.
Feeds
1. i get that she’s the mc and she’s starting to change the dynamics of the family but like as a reader this is feels like she’s a character with a lot of plot armour. like i don’t think it would’ve been bad to make her lose any of the “duels” bc i honestly think it could’ve added to the story
2. the cover of the story made it seem like her dad would be more relevant but most of the story especially at the start really revolves around her relationship with her grandfather. which don’t get me wrong that makes sense but like at the start the only time we really see her dad is when he brought her in. more over the start felt so rushed like tell me more about the dead son. show me more of their relationship building.
i think the story itself is like okay… like don’t get me wrong i’ve read a lot of story’s where the mc is like invincible or whatever and furthermore she’s just a kid but it js feels like there’s plot holes and the more i read the more like stupid it feels.