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Writing wise this is fucking great. The parallels, the endless loop of struggle, the tiny little detail placed everywhere. It’s the kind of story I’d analyse for an English essay. But 2 things: 1. I’ve read the whole thing and still have no clue how to pronounce Llewellyn. 2. I don’t think whatever was happening with shavonne made any sense? I thought he had some crazy mental illnesses/was a test subject of some kind but no he just had his memory erased once? Then what was up with the insomnia?
Wow okay this one is really interesting, I think it’s the first time where I’m not ment to like the main character? In carnbys other works, all the mcs are the hero type right? This is really different, it’s in the middle between the hero type and the mc from pig pen lol. But the story feels rushed or unfinished in a weird way? It’s a complete story but writing wise I feel like not every was done to its full potential
The improvement from hanged doll to here is insane. After just one previous work the art, characters and story jump up so many levels. Poor guy getting caught in the middle of all this tho
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