Why do you think the plot is predictable? I'm wondering, because I'm a writer myself and enjoy making plot, building the world and all. It would be nice to have some feedback!
I also don't understand please explain~~(￣∇￣")
I think it would be because the plot is repetitive
For starters the heroine attitude. She uses her previous knowledge of the world to get ahead, that's always something that bothers me. Shouldnt she have some feeling of moral conflict changing the world and causing the butterfly effect. Not only that but she is perfect now in everything that she does. Perfect magic , aces the test, perfect looks. The story even builds up how no one ever gets red only to have the heroine go beyond that, almost amazingly predictable. Her sister, could have a little more character depth too. Maybe give her a slight character arc where she is feeling insecure about herself or jealous because of her sister's newfound popularity, without making her a straight-up antagonist. I think the main thing to comment is that everyone here is a 1-dimensional character when they should be 3 dimensional. This is a kid who basically never talks to anyone yet he just got over it at the drop of a hat. I think it would have been better to have him watch from the shadows and quietly gather the courage to help her. And the actual side character villains have no meaning, give them some backstory at some point or just leave them out entirely. I mean what was the point of the girl who failed the test Everdine or whatever. Give everyone a reason for hating her. Like at some point we see the villain side characters reflect about themselves after being shown up. An inner monologue would go great. Something about how they feel the need to put her down out of the fear the world they were born in will reject them like they did her if they don't. Then there are the actual main characters. That boy who studies swordsmanship. He is an orphan from a horrible place yet he is still so bright and it only took like less than a year. His character is so clearly just serving the purpose to be useful to the heroine without adding anything other than that to his character.
Summary/ important part cause I got carried away:
The characters are flat and if someone doesn't immediently do something nice to the heroine or look good they are an antagonist wo serves no purpose. ex.:Everdine
The story built up how red is so strong only to have the heroine get that: predictable
The heroine gets number one on the test: predictable
The heroine gets a ton of guys either by accident or using past knowledge but nothing that she really worked hard to figure out herself: predictable
She succeeds at everything with no major bumps in the road: predictable.
If she does something I already knows its gonna end up well. There is no anticipation for the next chapter cause shes just gonna get some boost
Every character is just so 1 dimensional, serves one purpose, usually making heroine seem better, and that's it
Side note: it's actually quite ironic. Its trying to change up the norm of the heroine being all goog and everyone else,but ml bad, but is really doing the same thing.
and in response to world-building I have an opinion on magic. It can definitely be done right like in Villainess maker, but in a lot of manga/manhwa/manhua it feels like an excuse to just have things happen to the heroine. Or having a convenient way to fix a problem. It feels cheap and is robbing the audience a chance of seeing the characters fix the problem by pushing their physical bodies or working hard to use their intelligence.
I do accept the facts that her encounters with the MLs are too much...they just popped up everywhere she goes ._. Her slimming down instantly without any efforts also.....bothered me a lot. I wanted her to at least make a bit of effort but all those fats went away with a single breathing :>
However, her acing the test...it’s predictable but she did try her best. The OG Syl was portrayed as someone who did not like studying and never took a single step inside the library so she might have brains but she just never tried?
It’s just my opinion but her possessing lots of mana might be due to OG Syl having some kind of contract with the devil of something? Those people like Edine(?) are juz fleas to make the FLs look better while the last boss might be the black-haired guy. I think there will be a big fight or a life-death situation with the devils. HOPEFULLY:’)))
If it does not turn out like that and everything goes her ways... cliché situations like the black-haired man falling for her, the devil becoming her underling..or her being able defeat anyone with a snap appears..well..yeah...i’ll drop it too :’>
I do accept the facts that her encounters with the MLs are too much...they just popped up everywhere she goes ._. Her slimming down instantly without any efforts also.....bothered me a lot. I wanted her to at least make a bit of effort but all those fats went away with a single breathing :>
However, her acing the test...it’s predictable but she did try her best. The OG Syl was portrayed as someone who did not like studying and never took a single step inside the library so she might have brains but she just never tried?
It’s just my opinion but her possessing lots of mana might be due to OG Syl having some kind of contract with the devil of something? Those people like Edine(?) are juz fleas to make the FLs look better while the last boss might be the black-haired guy. I think there will be a big fight or a life-death situation with the devils. HOPEFULLY:’)))
If it does not turn out like that and everything goes FL’s ways... cliché situations like the black-haired man falling for her, the devil becoming her underling..or her being able defeat anyone with a snap appears..well..yeah...i might drop it too :’>
But i really do appreciate the arts, even the background is really pretty and in details.
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I agree this story can't really move forward that's why I suspect that the little sister is evil and the demon, they're here just because this story is stuck and they need more drama more spice. I too thought that the authors were just lazy so they made her lose some weight with magic. And I too don't get why every man sticks to the fl and they are magically attracted to them like for example the prince...like why does he like her? Why? She doesn't deserve this. I am reading this story just cuz I'm bored and because there aren't better ones updating
man, that art style is wasted on that plot. I could describe that last chapter in one word: predictable
I tried my best to get into this but I just cant do it. I don't think its going to get better either, so im dropping it now and would suggest the same.