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It’s only 6 chapters afaik, so I think the cramming is a bit to be expected lol
Good point, but they could easily resolve it by focusing on one plot point.
I did read two people are working on this one so I think that might've contributed to the things I pointed out. Lik they haven't found their rhythm yet but I'd be happy to see them develop.
The art style is amazing, but I do think the mangaka needs work on storyboarding and story progression.
There are times when the effects don't work with the tone (ex. When the host got mad at the girl. It's supposed to be a tense scene but the crying background behind the girl negates the tenseness)
Plot points fall flat sometimes due to the panelling. (ex. When it was hinted the host knew the guy prior to their meeting. The first hint was a thought bubble and a chibi. But the way it was panelled made it feel like a passing thought than a revelation because of how tiny the panels are. The second was a random conversation. Again, the cat scene was a tiny panel, and the only reason you can connect the host was there looking was because of a tuff of hair! We don't even see the perspective of the host, which I personally think would've made more emotional impact)
And lastly, I do think they crammed so much in so little chapters. Plot points like, (1) The host definitely knows him, (2) The host's rival is a bit scummy and might be up to no good, (3) The host is a sugar daddy?! Gasp?! was crammed in a single chapter.
Again, art is wonderful. Extremely wonderful, just needs a little bit more work. Still reading though.