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I think you should give it a few more reads it's actually quite fun!
I'm okay, but thank you for the offer.
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I think you should give it a few more reads it's actually quite fun!
I'm okay, but thank you for the offer.
Olivia is too... boring? Bare bones cardboard cutesy personality and then nothing else. Even when it comes to her actually fighting her dialogue is some version of "la la la la laaa laaaa". It isn't giving creepy it's giving someone writing their first horror story.