Firstly I have to mark I'm not into short stories in general ;) Secondly Lily's character is a shit, and a lead shouldn't be.
Don't get me wrong, I'm not saying the whole thing is "just shit". The story isn't esp revelatory but the ending is reasonable consequence of events - which is good. Core point's are fine too. Anna's character as well as the duchess are coherent and well written.
So WHY Lily is a stupid bitch who only wants to fuck and keeps calling it love? Ofc she is young so she could be manipulated by the duchess. However no way it would happened in one night! A few minutes after being shocked and felt abandoned she's happily fucked by Blake, elated with LOVE she has. What a bullshit. -> that can be "the short story" fault. No time to show how Blake slowly drives Anna away and plays Lily like a fiddle.
Even if we turn a blind eye to that, saying there wasn't time to show it, and the outcome is what matters, Lily's back with her stupidity. Despite being close to Anna for years, she wants to fuck her too, now! What is it? "A proof of love"? Ugh...
And those weak points don't correspond with quite pretty, expressive and detailed art style. I only wish the eyes weren't blurred. ╮(￣▽￣)╭
Firstly I have to mark I'm not into short stories in general ;)
Secondly Lily's character is a shit, and a lead shouldn't be.
Don't get me wrong, I'm not saying the whole thing is "just shit". The story isn't esp revelatory but the ending is reasonable consequence of events - which is good. Core point's are fine too. Anna's character as well as the duchess are coherent and well written.
So WHY Lily is a stupid bitch who only wants to fuck and keeps calling it love? Ofc she is young so she could be manipulated by the duchess. However no way it would happened in one night! A few minutes after being shocked and felt abandoned she's happily fucked by Blake, elated with LOVE she has. What a bullshit.
-> that can be "the short story" fault. No time to show how Blake slowly drives Anna away and plays Lily like a fiddle.
Even if we turn a blind eye to that, saying there wasn't time to show it, and the outcome is what matters, Lily's back with her stupidity. Despite being close to Anna for years, she wants to fuck her too, now! What is it? "A proof of love"? Ugh...
And those weak points don't correspond with quite pretty, expressive and detailed art style. I only wish the eyes weren't blurred. ╮(￣▽￣)╭