...this had the potential to be really great. Character development is always a good idea...but this story had poor execution and felt choppy at times. The sex scene should have had emotional build up in it not just leading up to it. Like Sugura seemed desperate and rushing to get it together because he was frustrated and ready to walk from a confusing ass Tatsuya that the sex scene ended looking "rapey" to people. It didn't come off like that to me but I can see why. That shit hurts like a mofo! I would have rather have him a bit clumsy because of his desperation...Tatsuya pissed me the fxxx off the whole time. Wishy washy and he should be happy someone loved his story so much and resonated with it so much, that he would want to act it out. That puzzled me and when Sugura kicked him out I was like YES! I also didn't understand his family problem since they seem to love him even though he's adopted.
...this had the potential to be really great. Character development is always a good idea...but this story had poor execution and felt choppy at times. The sex scene should have had emotional build up in it not just leading up to it. Like Sugura seemed desperate and rushing to get it together because he was frustrated and ready to walk from a confusing ass Tatsuya that the sex scene ended looking "rapey" to people. It didn't come off like that to me but I can see why. That shit hurts like a mofo! I would have rather have him a bit clumsy because of his desperation...Tatsuya pissed me the fxxx off the whole time. Wishy washy and he should be happy someone loved his story so much and resonated with it so much, that he would want to act it out. That puzzled me and when Sugura kicked him out I was like YES! I also didn't understand his family problem since they seem to love him even though he's adopted.