Originally I thought he knew he was a police rat, but now that I’ve read the chapters, I think when he called him a “rat” he meant he knew he was Daniel’s rat (which isn’t wrong either because technically Daniel did send him so he could spy on Raphael).
In the author’s notes at the end of the season they mention that they’d been working on this series since like January 2024, so I was a bit baffled that there seems no editor was available to steer it in a more cohesive way.
Apparently when it debuted, it ranked pretty high and on l*zhin Spanish it also premiered in the top 10, so it has its merits.
Overall the story is understandable, it just jumps times too much and acts like it doesn’t. For example, the chapter where Ian is reminiscing over the “cat” comment, the narrative made it seem like it had just happened, but we’ve been told that it had been 3 years. Just little things like that. I’m hoping that season 2 they get an editor (or a better one) and they tighten the narrative.
Ahhh i see- totally agree, this is essentially what I meant in my comment too. I had a feeling this story was popular, but I didn’t realize how big it had gotten on L*zhin! You really made this much clearer for me. Now it makes sense – I did feel like the story had a lot of potential, but my issue was that it often left too much for the reader to figure out on their own. And to be honest i dont mind i quite like using my brain lol BUt The simple narrative style could have been more complex, to give it that cohesive feeling, instead of leaving too many gaps that make you guess what’s going on. This creates issues later on which can also add confusion as it then leaps to a time gap not going further into detail. It’s nice to have some mystery, but when it’s pushed too far, it can end up feeling more confusing than intriguing.
Now I see it was more about the editor (or lack thereof), which really clears things up. Despite this, I’m still enjoying it, and I do think you're right about the “rat” comment—it does seem more like he meant Daniel’s rat, which adds to the lack of cohesion I was feeling as it gave me the impression that all this time he knew and still kept furthering there relationship . Among other scenarios.As you mentioned, it feels like certain chunks were introduced but not fully fleshed out or developed later. Hopefully in season 2 they get an editor i second this!
Giving us an actual story, lmao.
Well, scratch that — I’ve read quite a few like this, which unfortunately sucks because they have so much potential.
At least this one gives a slight bit more. I was so confused at the beginning because I thought Raphael knew he was a rat. He mentioned it early on, so I’m kind of perplexed as to how all of a sudden he doesn’t know.
This is what I mean when I say there’s so much potential, yet a lot of detail feels missing. We keep skipping years, and while it’s okay to do that, I see that you want to focus more on the smut stuff yummm lol— which is fine — but if you’re going to include a real story, you better believe there’s going to be critique. And a mafia at that ima judge cus u dont mess with my mafia type of yaois i live for those!
That said, I was still able to follow along easily. Now that it’s clear he doesn’t know, I’m more invested in Raphael and the struggle he’s facing. I wonder how he’s going to feel once Rowan tells him about his family.
I also feel like Rowan is really confused about where he wants to go with all of this.
Anyway, continue on.
I’m waiting for the next chapter.