Feels like it was written by a 16yo or something. The whole bdsm was so amateur-like when the seme is supposed to be an expert bc it’s his kink and all. The earrings as nipple piercings felt so awkward and wrong too. Like who tf uses normal earrings as nipple piercings. The drawing of the uke was awkward altogether. The dude looked like he had snorted cocaine the whole time. His expressions were always off and uncomfortable to watch. And the drawing style is not bad. The seme and the wife were super attractive and their expressions were well drawn. But the uke looked in shock the whole time with his eyebrows up. Like the dude was on drugs the whole time. I know it’s a short story. So I get the lack of attention to detail but it felt vain and of bad quality when there are short stories out there that are a lot more fun or interesting to read. Take the fallen lamb as an example.
Feels like it was written by a 16yo or something. The whole bdsm was so amateur-like when the seme is supposed to be an expert bc it’s his kink and all. The earrings as nipple piercings felt so awkward and wrong too. Like who tf uses normal earrings as nipple piercings.
The drawing of the uke was awkward altogether. The dude looked like he had snorted cocaine the whole time. His expressions were always off and uncomfortable to watch. And the drawing style is not bad. The seme and the wife were super attractive and their expressions were well drawn. But the uke looked in shock the whole time with his eyebrows up. Like the dude was on drugs the whole time.
I know it’s a short story. So I get the lack of attention to detail but it felt vain and of bad quality when there are short stories out there that are a lot more fun or interesting to read. Take the fallen lamb as an example.