this is kind of unrelated but to give my take on the ‘meh technique’ spice that gls or straight stories recieve is because porn usually caters to male genitalia. hence why when you read the average bl smut then think that it’s so good— in actuality it’s ass.
Yeah, this was more of just my critique on the story up to what I read. In general, I find better smut in bl (plot as well if I get on the right author - kind of a lot of them actually have good plot - including toxic stuff. They manage to do that right). Hentai almost never has good plot or spice to me (if that’s catered to males then I guess they don’t care about learning anything from it since they’re never getting the reactions those hentai show from what’s done in them), and I haven’t read nearly enough gl to get enough of a radar on that. I’ve read a few non spicy ones and the plots were pretty good sometimes, but the spicy ones I’ve been running into are a real hit or miss (still better than the mostly misses I get from straight).
Got through Ch. 6 and dropping. Lame plot (they put her in jail when she could communicate through writing that she killed her dad in self defense against what is highly likely sexual assault? - also they’re really missing out on enough interaction to explain the Stockholm syndrome happening since she isn’t just around the one chick), lackluster spice (not very creative and way too lacking in showing why the chars would cum from what seems like meh technique - like at least show a few panels of the insides getting rubbed or something), and super crappy translation (SO much of what’s said doesn’t sound like it adds up or just wouldn’t lead to chars reacting the way they do).
Also literally all the chars have been pretty and fit so it makes no sense when someone gets called ugly or not the right shape. Which reminds me that they don’t have boob physics down right which makes it look like everyone had a boob job (which is fine for a few, but why make that the case for everyone - including the virgin FL??).
And why did they wait to put that warning until ch 7? The sex scene right before was rape already (coercion is the same thing and Jua was def raped regardless of her cumming and pissing herself). If Lee is nodding as consent then the translation NEEDS to have that written in since she can’t talk. That warning should’ve been in almost all the chapters up to then.