I think I'll drop this here lol I've seen this on the front page before and I love stories with kids so I've always wanted to try it and so I did! Now I just regret it lol This is why I always read the comments first and not rush in and read on my own (I didn't read the comments this time) For one, the humour feels forced. It feels like the writing is supposed to be funny somewhere along the lines but it just isn't maybe it's because of the pacing of the story or whatever but the forced humour was really getting to me but I ignored it and kept going Two....what do you mean he's dead? What...how old was the MC anyway? He's really gonna let his mother/older brother or WHOEVER that was tell him what to do with HIS body and the child that was inside of him? To the point that he straight up said the father of the child died without a care in the world? Mind you...the love interest hasn't done anything bad to the MC. Treated him gently in bed too during their one night stand. Yet he can so easily tell people the guy's dead?? Like atp he just used him lol. Got a child from him and just left. 2.2, why is even his FRIEND telling the love interest the MC is dead...like oh my.. is it that easy for people to say others are dead..and they're clearly not that good of friends if the MC didn't tell him what happened that night properly even though that's what the story made it seem like. Cause why would that friend's first thought be "I should tell this guy the MC is dead even though he's literally pregnant with HIS child and my friend didn't make it seem like something bad happened between them!" Like he did NOT have to say he died. 2.3, that idiot told the CHILD he died?? Oh my gosh...I would grow up RESENTING my parent if I knew they told me my other parent died just to run away from their problems. 3, the pacing seems SO rushed. It seems like they only included the "dead" parts so they could do a time lapse...like they were other ways to get to the time lapse... "MC gets pregnant from one night stand but has doubts about relationship so travels somewhere else to live or just MOVES to somewhere else and raises the child on his own." Just tell the kid their dad isn't there. He's away doing important things if you don't wanna make the other parent seem like a bad person. Then have them meet again after the time lapse not tell the kid and everyone that hes DEAD bro PLEASE. can yall tell this dead thing is really bothering me Another thing too...why exactly did he have ti move??? I can understand quitting his job. But he said he wanted to start fresh...so he goes back to old roots (his mother/brother)??? Be so fr. That's not starting fresh twin. He could've just stayed at his old place, kept the baby, and if he did need help he always had his friend there (TJE SAME FRJEND THAT TOLD THE FATJER OF THE CHILD THAT HES DEAD), or actually go to his family. What are they gonna do? Kill a 4 year old with their bare hands? (Idk he looks 4)
I think I'll drop this here lol
I've seen this on the front page before and I love stories with kids so I've always wanted to try it and so I did! Now I just regret it lol
This is why I always read the comments first and not rush in and read on my own (I didn't read the comments this time)
For one, the humour feels forced. It feels like the writing is supposed to be funny somewhere along the lines but it just isn't maybe it's because of the pacing of the story or whatever but the forced humour was really getting to me but I ignored it and kept going
Two....what do you mean he's dead? What...how old was the MC anyway? He's really gonna let his mother/older brother or WHOEVER that was tell him what to do with HIS body and the child that was inside of him? To the point that he straight up said the father of the child died without a care in the world? Mind you...the love interest hasn't done anything bad to the MC. Treated him gently in bed too during their one night stand. Yet he can so easily tell people the guy's dead?? Like atp he just used him lol. Got a child from him and just left.
2.2, why is even his FRIEND telling the love interest the MC is dead...like oh my.. is it that easy for people to say others are dead..and they're clearly not that good of friends if the MC didn't tell him what happened that night properly even though that's what the story made it seem like. Cause why would that friend's first thought be "I should tell this guy the MC is dead even though he's literally pregnant with HIS child and my friend didn't make it seem like something bad happened between them!" Like he did NOT have to say he died.
2.3, that idiot told the CHILD he died?? Oh my gosh...I would grow up RESENTING my parent if I knew they told me my other parent died just to run away from their problems.
3, the pacing seems SO rushed. It seems like they only included the "dead" parts so they could do a time lapse...like they were other ways to get to the time lapse...
"MC gets pregnant from one night stand but has doubts about relationship so travels somewhere else to live or just MOVES to somewhere else and raises the child on his own." Just tell the kid their dad isn't there. He's away doing important things if you don't wanna make the other parent seem like a bad person. Then have them meet again after the time lapse not tell the kid and everyone that hes DEAD bro PLEASE.
can yall tell this dead thing is really bothering me
Another thing too...why exactly did he have ti move??? I can understand quitting his job. But he said he wanted to start fresh...so he goes back to old roots (his mother/brother)??? Be so fr. That's not starting fresh twin. He could've just stayed at his old place, kept the baby, and if he did need help he always had his friend there (TJE SAME FRJEND THAT TOLD THE FATJER OF THE CHILD THAT HES DEAD), or actually go to his family. What are they gonna do? Kill a 4 year old with their bare hands? (Idk he looks 4)