This story feels so forced rn. I don't mean the idea of her finding a husband to escape the obsessive guys but rather the pacing. The prologue/1st chapter says the main idea of the story but then in the 2nd we switch to a different timeline. No indication that we did that. Then I'm getting confused on what the fuck is happening. After that she somehow remembers that this was a game with minimal information about who she was/what the game was and what will happen or who the female lead in the game was. The "adopted" daughter is a typical evil sister that tries to manipulate the others to not like her. I like how she isn't stupid asf and adapts to the situation but whenever something happens we get her crying, someone protecting her and then no further fight but rather MC walking away or something else happening until the sister returns and decides to manipulate again. The brother feels like a wish version of the "I hated you but you're beginning to grow on me" type of brother. He changes his feelings every single chapter with his father being the same. The world is generic yet we get no information about the history or any other type of world building. And rather than that there are divine beings that curse someone?? And the MC has some kind of special power that she got from somewhere but she should have no power?? The idea was really cool. It would have been interesting to see MC play with the 3 guys and evade them as much as possible while finding her husband. I would have loved it being comedy and showing the dark themes of having obsessed people around you with humour mixed in it. Yet this feels like a story where the MC cannot do wrong and is smart because she's smart. It feels empty with how little information there is.
Yet the story is such a good one. I love the idea of having her be a player once and forgetting her memory when the sister comes in but remembering them when she almost dies. It isn't only a nice concept but also a really good way to make the sister mysterious. I find it confusing what powers the people have and how they're using it but I am please to find magic having a bigger role than just being there and brought up in situations only when needed. I love the sisters dynamic of maybe being a player herself or obsessed with one of the original male leads while still trying to sabotage the mc that is clueless to her manipulation. For now she is a well written character which I cannot help but like how she is. Although I hate her to the core with what she did to our MC.
overall I like the story a lot. I do hope they find a better pacing on it and rework the consistency of information and thoughts given to the reader. It has a really big potential. I'd love to see if she can pick a husband later on and who it'll be to protect herself from the original male leads.(๑•ㅂ•)و✧ about 8/10
This story feels so forced rn. I don't mean the idea of her finding a husband to escape the obsessive guys but rather the pacing.
The prologue/1st chapter says the main idea of the story but then in the 2nd we switch to a different timeline. No indication that we did that. Then I'm getting confused on what the fuck is happening. After that she somehow remembers that this was a game with minimal information about who she was/what the game was and what will happen or who the female lead in the game was.
The "adopted" daughter is a typical evil sister that tries to manipulate the others to not like her. I like how she isn't stupid asf and adapts to the situation but whenever something happens we get her crying, someone protecting her and then no further fight but rather MC walking away or something else happening until the sister returns and decides to manipulate again.
The brother feels like a wish version of the "I hated you but you're beginning to grow on me" type of brother. He changes his feelings every single chapter with his father being the same.
The world is generic yet we get no information about the history or any other type of world building. And rather than that there are divine beings that curse someone?? And the MC has some kind of special power that she got from somewhere but she should have no power??
The idea was really cool. It would have been interesting to see MC play with the 3 guys and evade them as much as possible while finding her husband. I would have loved it being comedy and showing the dark themes of having obsessed people around you with humour mixed in it.
Yet this feels like a story where the MC cannot do wrong and is smart because she's smart. It feels empty with how little information there is.
Yet the story is such a good one. I love the idea of having her be a player once and forgetting her memory when the sister comes in but remembering them when she almost dies.
It isn't only a nice concept but also a really good way to make the sister mysterious.
I find it confusing what powers the people have and how they're using it but I am please to find magic having a bigger role than just being there and brought up in situations only when needed.
I love the sisters dynamic of maybe being a player herself or obsessed with one of the original male leads while still trying to sabotage the mc that is clueless to her manipulation. For now she is a well written character which I cannot help but like how she is. Although I hate her to the core with what she did to our MC.
overall I like the story a lot. I do hope they find a better pacing on it and rework the consistency of information and thoughts given to the reader. It has a really big potential. I'd love to see if she can pick a husband later on and who it'll be to protect herself from the original male leads.(๑•ㅂ•)و✧
about 8/10