the author tries to frame the mc as a clever, seductive villainess, but the writing leans on exaggerated dialogue and constant “look how smart i am” moments. instead of feeling genuinely cunning, it comes off as forced and a little corny. the mc is written like she’s always one step ahead. oh someone is picking on her? that woman’s husband is cheating. oh jediah is flustered by her? she wants the merchant guild, not his actual attention. oh her husband is complaining? she talks back to him like she’s got the upper hand. it feels like a gimmick. the author keeps trying to push this narrative that the mc is enticing. the countess likes her suddenly because she wore a dress from the past. the prince disguised as a duke likes her because she’s so different. her husband is starting to like her because she’s so different and alluring. that one guy is liking her too. even her knight blushes. and it’s like ? how did you all start to like her? there’s no real groundwork for why she’s so alluring. it just feels thrown together. i wish we could’ve gotten more development.
for example: the countess begins to like her after five chapters. let’s say, the countess was interested at first because she wore a similar dress from her debutant days. but then the mc shows how smart she is! they portrayed the countess to be this girl character but she folded within two panels? i mean, i like the story but with the recent chapters, it feels so corny. she’s not a villainess, she’s just playing a very bad role. also, maybe it’s because i haven’t reread the chapters, but how does she even know the baron seamus wants influence and is talking to the merchants?? like girl, you’re powerless, how tf do you know that?
the author tries to frame the mc as a clever, seductive villainess, but the writing leans on exaggerated dialogue and constant “look how smart i am” moments. instead of feeling genuinely cunning, it comes off as forced and a little corny. the mc is written like she’s always one step ahead. oh someone is picking on her? that woman’s husband is cheating. oh jediah is flustered by her? she wants the merchant guild, not his actual attention. oh her husband is complaining? she talks back to him like she’s got the upper hand. it feels like a gimmick. the author keeps trying to push this narrative that the mc is enticing. the countess likes her suddenly because she wore a dress from the past. the prince disguised as a duke likes her because she’s so different. her husband is starting to like her because she’s so different and alluring. that one guy is liking her too. even her knight blushes. and it’s like ? how did you all start to like her? there’s no real groundwork for why she’s so alluring. it just feels thrown together. i wish we could’ve gotten more development.
for example: the countess begins to like her after five chapters. let’s say, the countess was interested at first because she wore a similar dress from her debutant days. but then the mc shows how smart she is! they portrayed the countess to be this girl character but she folded within two panels? i mean, i like the story but with the recent chapters, it feels so corny. she’s not a villainess, she’s just playing a very bad role. also, maybe it’s because i haven’t reread the chapters, but how does she even know the baron seamus wants influence and is talking to the merchants?? like girl, you’re powerless, how tf do you know that?