It started off with a lot of potential. The setting was well explained. The genre of a slight angst filled romance-y light mystery feel was well created with the first like 40 chapters.
The ending with the second Prince Ian, could have had a lot more chapters, filled with more story and more romance.
Cedric as a side character did not have to be introduced beyond being saved and really didn't need to come back into relevance that soon.
The first love triangle wasn't even resolved before this new character, Cedric, came into play.
Jinsoos sister didn't need to take up space as Shae at all.
All this extra plot took away from Carsen rooting himself as the ML.
Kael was rejected for things he did that Carsen was given a free pass even before they got together. You can reject someone for whatever reason, but if you're the author at least keep your plot consistent.
Carsen had so much potential really building a relationship with Maythan and the only reason you know Carsen is the ML is because of how much Kael was rejected.
The only thing Carsen did that Kael didnt that made it seem like Maythan was more into Carsen was the fact that Maythan heard Carsens tragic backstory and being forced to help Carsen by holding his hand.
If it happened once and was really developed into this romantic gesture, ok there was chemistry. But they just kind of meet in the dead of night to hold hands and just exist. No talking, no badump.
No nothing and then Maythan goes and blushes more at every other random character out there and you say Carsen is the ML?
And then Maythan goes and dies only thinking oh I love you Carsen? Like he had more chemistry than Kael for God's sake.
I found some of the side stories and even there there's more focus on the side characters and the relationship between Jinsoo and Carsen is only implied through Everyone saying OMG they're in love, but theres no plot showing them being lovey dovey like literally all of the other characters.
This had so much potential, but like literally the main couple is given the least amount of anything.
It started off with a lot of potential. The setting was well explained. The genre of a slight angst filled romance-y light mystery feel was well created with the first like 40 chapters.
The ending with the second Prince Ian, could have had a lot more chapters, filled with more story and more romance.
Cedric as a side character did not have to be introduced beyond being saved and really didn't need to come back into relevance that soon.
The first love triangle wasn't even resolved before this new character, Cedric, came into play.
Jinsoos sister didn't need to take up space as Shae at all.
All this extra plot took away from Carsen rooting himself as the ML.
Kael was rejected for things he did that Carsen was given a free pass even before they got together. You can reject someone for whatever reason, but if you're the author at least keep your plot consistent.
Carsen had so much potential really building a relationship with Maythan and the only reason you know Carsen is the ML is because of how much Kael was rejected.
The only thing Carsen did that Kael didnt that made it seem like Maythan was more into Carsen was the fact that Maythan heard Carsens tragic backstory and being forced to help Carsen by holding his hand.
If it happened once and was really developed into this romantic gesture, ok there was chemistry. But they just kind of meet in the dead of night to hold hands and just exist. No talking, no badump.
No nothing and then Maythan goes and blushes more at every other random character out there and you say Carsen is the ML?
And then Maythan goes and dies only thinking oh I love you Carsen? Like he had more chemistry than Kael for God's sake.
I found some of the side stories and even there there's more focus on the side characters and the relationship between Jinsoo and Carsen is only implied through Everyone saying OMG they're in love, but theres no plot showing them being lovey dovey like literally all of the other characters.
This had so much potential, but like literally the main couple is given the least amount of anything.