I know this is supposed to be a shorter story, but it would've been much more intense and intriguing to see both the MC and the ML try and hide their secondary genders from everyone and one another a little longer and have this gradual reveal of who they are as their attraction to each other due to their secondary genders emerges, and more and more subtle, yet dangerous symptoms arise, until it gets more and more difficult for them to hide... Imagine how sexy that would be.
I know this is supposed to be a shorter story, but it would've been much more intense and intriguing to see both the MC and the ML try and hide their secondary genders from everyone and one another a little longer and have this gradual reveal of who they are as their attraction to each other due to their secondary genders emerges, and more and more subtle, yet dangerous symptoms arise, until it gets more and more difficult for them to hide... Imagine how sexy that would be.