Firstly why is he NOT panicked at all after being sent to a strange world? he should have more questions considering the fact that he.. oh , y’know… JUST DIED?!?!
Secondly, how convenient is it that the mc’s childhood friend immediately introduces herself and her backstory in a simple and digestible way, rather than being concerned for her best friend who possibly has amnesia ( sign of brain injury )
Granted, I am only halfway through chapter one and all this might be explained later , but if you’re an author an you choose to have your first sex scene that was VERY coincidental and adds absolutely nothing of substance except yaoi slop before you ground your plot.. it’s a telling sign of the future writings quality
Firstly why is he NOT panicked at all after being sent to a strange world? he should have more questions considering the fact that he.. oh , y’know… JUST DIED?!?!
Secondly, how convenient is it that the mc’s childhood friend immediately introduces herself and her backstory in a simple and digestible way, rather than being concerned for her best friend who possibly has amnesia ( sign of brain injury )
Granted, I am only halfway through chapter one and all this might be explained later , but if you’re an author an you choose to have your first sex scene that was VERY coincidental and adds absolutely nothing of substance except yaoi slop before you ground your plot.. it’s a telling sign of the future writings quality