It may just be me, but the pacing of the story feels a little off. Especially the romance between 2 ml. It felt forced and unnecessary or it could've been executed better.
When Mr. Golden retriever was introduced I did not expect him to be a love interest. It could be that it was implied when FL saw how handsome he was in the vision, but I felt no spark.
Same with Mr. Scaredy cat, If they delivered scenes of them bonding over their shared powers a little more I could be better convinced that they fell for each other. If they showed FL and ML exchanging their own story and experience with ghosts a lot earlier in a casual setting, say example at night both in their nightwear out for a walk to clear their head from all the ghostly activities. They open up to each other and begin to develop sentiments about another.
Instead what they had done to drive the romance, was hastily introduce Mr. Golden as someone interested in FL just to cement the jealousy Mr. Scaredy feels.
!!Not done reading, just initial reaction!!
It may just be me, but the pacing of the story feels a little off. Especially the romance between 2 ml. It felt forced and unnecessary or it could've been executed better.
When Mr. Golden retriever was introduced I did not expect him to be a love interest. It could be that it was implied when FL saw how handsome he was in the vision, but I felt no spark.
Same with Mr. Scaredy cat, If they delivered scenes of them bonding over their shared powers a little more I could be better convinced that they fell for each other. If they showed FL and ML exchanging their own story and experience with ghosts a lot earlier in a casual setting, say example at night both in their nightwear out for a walk to clear their head from all the ghostly activities. They open up to each other and begin to develop sentiments about another.
Instead what they had done to drive the romance, was hastily introduce Mr. Golden as someone interested in FL just to cement the jealousy Mr. Scaredy feels.