Mm.

I feel like the chapters need to be just slightly longer because the plot isn’t being done justice. It almost feels like jump cut video editing, it’s not flowing smoothly even if I have an understanding of the situation. Like an extra panel here and there can really make a scene have more emotion or tension.

For example, how are you going to have the OG Luna show up as a damn force ghost but treat it like a Stan Lee marvel cameo. It was like a blink and miss it thing, I felt no emotion about it and even felt disjointed like the anger of MC was forced and then the ghost doing his little 2 second possession was stilted. A few extra panels could’ve smoothed it out to be more emotionally charged and cohesive.