your art may be fine, but your storytelling leaves a lot to be desired. I'm just put off by this story for a number of reasons. As her first Omegaverse story, it was a flop to me. I felt that it started ok, like the typical bl romance story, but I think it started to fall apart when she introduced the brother too early. I had to reread this whole series all over again in order to make sense of where the poor storytelling started. I can see that the author didn't really give Hana and Renjaku a chance to get to know each other before putting an obstacle in their way. Because of that, we didn't really get a feel for how both characters really are and why they are the way they are; Hana, though a virgin character, acts like he has no common sense the moment he's off the job; Renjaku, though raised a rich boy and is a celebrated floral artist, speaks like he's been in a gang as he grew up. These two, as the MCs of the manga, are giving me such oddly disconnected vibes in terms of character build. It's very confusing and I can't back this as a good manga.
your art may be fine, but your storytelling leaves a lot to be desired. I'm just put off by this story for a number of reasons. As her first Omegaverse story, it was a flop to me. I felt that it started ok, like the typical bl romance story, but I think it started to fall apart when she introduced the brother too early. I had to reread this whole series all over again in order to make sense of where the poor storytelling started. I can see that the author didn't really give Hana and Renjaku a chance to get to know each other before putting an obstacle in their way. Because of that, we didn't really get a feel for how both characters really are and why they are the way they are; Hana, though a virgin character, acts like he has no common sense the moment he's off the job; Renjaku, though raised a rich boy and is a celebrated floral artist, speaks like he's been in a gang as he grew up. These two, as the MCs of the manga, are giving me such oddly disconnected vibes in terms of character build. It's very confusing and I can't back this as a good manga.