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Veteran Jayden is suffering from severe PTSD after losing his crush Matthew, during their deployment...
this was a breath of fresh air—no lack of communication, no manipulation, nothing wishy washy or disturbing… these two are genuinely really sweet, and their comfort seemed to radiate through the screen. there was just one thing i had some confusion about—i felt that the pacing was a bit difficult to understand, and i couldn’t really tell how much time was passing between scenes. they seem to love each other so deeply, but with the way it was written, it looked like they had only known each other for a couple weeks at most… furthermore, it made it unclear just how suddenly jayden’s mental health improved. you would expect there to be a more gradual change, but i didn’t see that. basically… i would’ve loved to see MORE of this story, because i feel that certain things were underdeveloped, mostly due to the small chapter count. i would love to see some side stories for this. maybe something about diego?