beta
feels kinda rushed. there’s so much potential to explore the characters feelings. I wanted to see more of sion agonizing about starting to want to protect laila. I kept reading further then suddenly they became teens. and i get that sion doesn’t talk much but the writer could at least spare more lines of them blocking the thoughts of feeling comfy instead of fear/guilt. sion almost had the thought of “is she a regressor too?’” but the author did not further this potential.
the next chance that they missed is when sion returned as an adult. How better would it have been for all the beautiful the scenery for the MC to have a bit of a flashback seeing the adult sion again for the first time. If the author wants to, they could still have him reach out ot her and pull her back to reality. and continue to the existing scenes. I agree with the comments that they are downplaying Laila’s side. Sion also could use a bit of a flashback for an extra guilt