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Dear author, are u trying to get us scared? Hooked? It's not working. It's boring. There are no sight of redemption arc for anyone. Nothing. It's just shallow and selfish pain. We know MC is suffering. The son is just a younger short-sighted version of his father. So what? Do you really want us to cheer for a cute romance arc? Where? I mean, even from MC's perspective, everything is just superficial and over-simplified. Also, I hate how this mansion is everything we have, even for a possible resolution of conflict. Please, are there life beyond the gates?