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Her personality has been consistent, i think the difference is now she doesnt know the future. And honestly her reluctance to cut off the traitors in her family would make more sense had the story fleshed out her relationship with them more. Cause at most, we know how much she cherishes her brother, but outside of that the rest of the family is kinda a blank, even the parents. The betrayal of that part of their family isnt interesting bc it isnt fleshed out. Had it been this arc would seem cooler. Like with ole boy in 95, had we seen him more instead of just going off of kaylas vague ass memory if him, this would seem more intense.
I also think because Kayla has been consistent is whats making this fall flat. She has shown no impactful growth, a good time to have done more development would have been during her time preparing her family to stay nuetral, having her interacting more with her family outside of meeting and mements with the brought up family members like the traitors and dropping tid bits of foreshadowing to them would have built reader tension better and grown more emotional depth in all the characters. The premise its self isnt boring, its poorly executed. Her family feels disposable to the reader but theyre trying to make her this 'for my family' kind of girl, but thats only well done when the readers see how attached the character is and why theyre close in the first place for a third party to root for the Mc's belief. On another note, she seems weak because she has the same strength as she did at the beginning of the story and yet the trials she face now are more difficult. This makes her weak overall and makes her lack of growth very obvious. Having the ML help her discover her strength isnt a bad thing, especially considering the bloodline thing, however, it would have been more endearing if at some point before the princes return she had another 'upgrade' that involved her brother in this universe to show that she can grow outside the prince but also that she didnt just cast him off to his wife when all was said and done (considering the start of this was heavy with the regret she had when ignoring her brother from the ogworld).
This is getting long so ill stop here, but those are my bigger peeves.