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Why is everything happening so fast? It feels like a conflict without any type of build up. To be such an important part of the story it kinda feels like it happened in a day. I think it should have taken more time in order to create tension.
I also feel like her decision to see him one more time felt very rushed.
Idk if this is going to sound exaggerated but it seems like the characters didn't actually suffer or went through something they haven't been through before, don't get me wrong I didn't want her to get beaten to death or something, but the conflict and their circumstances felt pretty bland