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Would be a lot more sympathetic to the dame, if her focus wasn't just the territory. I think it'd be really interesting conflict, for her to admire who Sylvan was and loath who he is now, but it doesn't seem like any of that affection was ever there, just greed for territory.
I'm really curious as to where this will go (DO NOT SPOIL ME FOR THE LOVE OF GOD), there are two very different, but reasonable endings:
Either Sylhan regains his former glory and power, or he'll make peace with a new life elsewhere. I would be completely content with both endings.
Obviously, him becoming the lord of Khalak is so satisfying. All the injustice would be corrected and he'd get to become who he was, before it was taken from him.
But he isn't the lord of Khalak anymore, he's hurt and he's content with simple happiness. His friends from the past are mostly gone and forcing himself to be a memory of a man long gone doesn't sound pleasant.
Both ending have strong negative implications also, a great deal of people would have to die for Sylvan to regain his throne, and a great deal of people who dedicated their life to the young lord of Khalak would be betrayed by him running away.