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Gonna read this, because the art is great and I LOOOOOOOOOOOVE actually masochistic mcs, but I really hate the storytelling of the first chapter!! Flashback on a flashback??!?! Introducing Eli three times over???? It just feels confusing!!
I understand that they have to put smut in the first chapter, but starting the episode on it, only to do a flashback, only for it to go back to smut on the last minute feels so pointless.
And I understand that the rest of the story will be 100% better and that most BL manhwas these days have to start this way, but it suuuuuuuuck. IT SUCKS ASSSSSSSS!! Give me time to feel the tension between them, give me a moment to wonder if they recognize each other. AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA. AND I KNOW! I KNOW NO ONE CARES. I know no one goes on nhentai and critiques the pacing of the fucking-my-friend's-mum storyline. But I do...!!! I care....!! I know that if in the mid-point the story slowed down, then the tension would make the climax (in your friend's mum) more satisfying!!!!!! I care....!!!!!!