beta
*want to point out first that I actually really loved this story and the characters, the plot is interesting and fun BUT I’d say it could have been so much better. IMO it’s still worth the read, it’s still really really funny and to me, it makes me like the story more. Two things tho,
1) pacing should have been slower, felt rushed as soon as the mc was introduced to the story. Easily could have been a 60-90 chapter story and honestly would have been a lot better if the story was longer or if the author paced the plot differently.
2) pointless rape at the end that the mc didn’t even seem to care? O.o if the author wanted to put that evil spirit in as a conflict it should have been handled differently. And I’m glad the character was brought back but I was hoping for more story other than him just raping and poofing as if nothing happened.