beta
My best friend and crush turned out to be a possessive lover?! Takuma, the star of the basketball te...
That was so.. unnatural. The pacing is horrible, the story feels like an excuse to draw smut, the entire "oh he's my idol, best friend, love, blah blah blah" is more offputting than "cute", the characters are horrifically cliche, the characters just keeping in and out of the story so you don't know who is who or what their names (not to mention most of them are given zero significance and even if they're even remotely a t a d interesting, they get replace with new characters and leave the story anyway). You just introduce some random girl for jealousy, whose confession was so boring and casual, it's wild. I don't even remember anyone's names cause what's the point? Not to mention, zero chemistry. They went straight to the confession, you can't even emotionally connect with their characters or get invested in their relationship. Then it so very quickly jumps from the confession to this bitch getting lonely. They haven't even started a relationship and he's getting lonely?! Their past is even boring. It's a real talent making a two second chapter of their BACKSTORY the most boring and confusing chapter in the story. It acts like we don knew this bitch was some kinda sports player but last we saw him, they were on a school trip. Which randomly they arent on. We'll just ignore ignore fact that we're don't even know anything about their classmates, surroundings, or personal lives. And those arent even a quarter of my thoughts. It's just not a good story. Nothing about it is good.