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This is off to a good start. But....if I was the MC, I would have abandoned the FL quickly. All she knows how to do is nag, cry, and act high-and-mighty. I understand this is an unprecedented event and your nerves are high and you're running scared, but you don't treat your savior like trash just because he's not in your financial lane. He saved your butt when he didn't have to open that door. And then you go and shout in the midst of a zombie outbreak when you know noise and movement attracts them??...I would have abandoned her so fast!! She's lucky MC grabbed her to run!!
Hopefully the FL's character will start to develop soon as the severity of the situation finally sinks into her brain. Also, why did she put back on the shorts?? She was at MC's house and couldn't find any pants to protect her legs from scratches and potential bites??