beta
i only have three critiques:
1. why was there sexual assault thrown in, only for it not to be addressed? and for their first time to be directly after, and as a result of the SA (because sigmund got jealous and took it the wrong way, “if just anyone, then will i do” etc) was incredibly unnecessary. i’ll say it time and time again, but these bl authors LOVE to throw in SA/rape bc either they have a fetish, the readers have a fetish or both have a fetish for it
2. sigmund’s relationship with sigfried - definitely needed to be more fleshed out, and for them to have some more closure. this ties in with my third point, that it needs to be longer, but there definitely needs to be more chapters with brunhild bringing up sigfried’s insecurities and worries up to sigmund, who then should sit down sigfriend and ease his worries and doubts. i understand that sigmund also feels guilty and his own guilt and awkwardness makes it difficult for him to deal with sigfried, but shipping him off to a boarding school as well definitely doesn’t help. the two of them need to have an earnest heart to heart, and heal their wounds.
3. for sure, needed to be longer. this was a nice story, very cutesy, palate cleanser-esque. it definitely should’ve been a good fifty chapters to resolve everything. from the secondary couple getting together, brunhild’s father stop being an ass and letting them be a couple, telling us what happened to brunhild’s mother (is she dead? probably, since we’ve never seen her), sigmund addressing his sister and brother-in-laws deaths with brunhild, to brunhild becoming an official knight and just overall fluff between the mcs
overall, nice story