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Squeezing the space between my eyebrows in exasperation... Im sorry, the female characters (aside from the awesome aunt, squad leader, and maid) around his age haven't done much... Nor really makes the story very engaging outside of possible 'relations' issues. Like - aside from personal problems, they don't serve very much other than cannon foddles to the plot rn, and if they had more engaging personality and worth outside of being centered on the MC theyd be worth following and seeing them more, but they just make me tired cause I know we're gonna get endless pages of weird tensions and back and forth that only serves to make the reading think "oh she likes him" or "oh, he might end up liking her" and along that sort. If you're making an action, idk, maybe focus on making romance in action? Not action in romance???