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I'm reading Ch.3 and MC's internal monologue calling herself old and ugly is so tone deaf (I get that she's feeling negative towards herself, but...), no hate but the author draws her like a plucky teenager with overly voluptuous curves - if she wanted to portray MC being overworked, sleeping little and caring after herself even less then give her at least some eyebags!!!! Then the transition would be visible after ML takes care of her and she has the energy to be looking after herself again
I just feel that takes away realism from this story, makes it feeling like an overly glammed fairytale