beta
The story is pretty cute so far, and I do like it. But it really has a lot of time skips, it felt like there wasn't a lot planned. Like, it would have been nice to see the relationship change with the female lead and the main character, instead of in "In two weeks we were best friends", or even with Shelby's parents. How did they automatically start treating her like a daughter, and where was her reaction to all of this? Idk, it felt a little empty.(〜￣△￣)〜