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This is cute and all but it feels a little too flat for me...
Not that I'm dropping reading this, since i read till chapter 77 just to see if it'll get a bit more of a kick...
But i feel like compared to the other stories out there, while it's cute and all, it feels boring, reads like teen angst and feels stupid at times （￣へ￣)
Like... Karlyle's eternal internal monologue not only reads something like the fanfics i read as a teen but it also never endsssssss（/TДT)/
And their conflict before becoming couple... IDK man. I get that the conflict was their feelings weren't at each other's level but the way everything was set up from the beginning, I honestly feels like it didn't sit well with me. It felt like a last minute idea or a poorly built up conflict. Like... With the way Ash has been acting before the confession, I was more surprised and confused how HE'S the one whose feelings needed catching up to do... AND HE DOESN'T SEEM ANY DIFFERENT AFTER GETTING TO TOGETHER FOR REAL NOW
IDK. Plus the sex scenes too. Like the flirting and kissing = Hot but then the sex feels like meh. I think it's the angles the artist chose. It didn't feel like their bodies were connected. All i keep seeing was zoom ins of their faces and weird angles. Not so much of a connection down there.
Overall...
Would i read it again? No.
Would i finish reading it? Yeah sure but wouldn't really be running to read it.
Would i read the scanlation of Kyle and Nick's story if i saw it? Maybe. And I'd def recommend reading it first than this because this def screams sequel even tho there's nothing before it.