beta
I mean, it isn't bad. Ofc, there are some odd things hapenning here, but overall the story is easy to digest, nothing complicated and I really enjoyed it. Also it is quite refreshing to see (maybe not the best, but not the worst) an attempt to show thoughts and problems inside of their heads.
To be honest, at first I was like, she may be not really smart, but the plot is kinda ok, but now, when she run away for no fking reason - it's so frustrating, FL is dumb and dorsn't know how to use brain, this could be much more interesting if she told him from the start what happend and stayed with him and then problems arised bcs of what she did and they try to resolve it together