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The plot feels a bit disorganized, I wish it was longer so there could've been more panels/time to properly develop their relationship. The SA scene felt like it got used as a plot device so they can have sex, I hated it. I've seen reviews saying that they hate Sigmund for blaming Brunhild after getting SA'd, but I'd say the creator could've just gone through with this story without that scene instead of shoving it down the throats of both the leads and the readers. It pissed me off too when even Brunhild was made to just gloss over it because what ended up being the main focus of the interaction was the sex afterwards.
Overall, it's cute. However, the more you try to think about it, the more you'll see the plot holes with the weak worldbuilding it has. But most of these problems could've been solved if this was longer, and the creator had more time to build the narrative instead of just doing time skips towards the end.
HeartA is saying that Monaka will drop White Jack if he isn't useful as a diva anymore, but he's literally never been that great in playing his role as a party member in the first place...
I'm just confused, and maybe it could be chalked up to White Jack being overcome with emotions because it's true that he doesn't know much about Monaka outside of the game. But he should already know that the guy wouldn't be interested in him for his "value" in the game when he's been putting up with all the slip-ups of a support who can't do his role properly, despite Monaka being a competitive ranker.
It sounds harsh, I know, but it's true and White Jack himself admits how much he sucks. Another thing is that I don't know why HeartA was so confident in mentioning Hyeji when it seems like he's the bad one for flirting with Mokkabread while she's still in a relationship with Monaka and he even took advantage of Mona not being around/needing time to collect himself (hence stepping away from the game). Mokkabread also sounds like a jerk, because why is she hanging around some other guy, who isn't hiding his interests for something more than friendship, while still being with her boyfriend. At the very least break up with the other party first (╯°Д °)╯╧╧
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i totally agree !! white jack has always been a noob when they first met. it seems like they've been playing together for a while now but even monaka said that his skills hasn't improved much, if mona is really only using white jack for his skills he wouldn't have spent this much effort into helping him improve. I get that this conflict will help them understand each other better n bring them closer together but srsly??? （￣へ￣）