beta
He needs a huge character development. I understand this need to be perfect and to suceed no matter what, but he really needs a change maybe if he said something like,
"looking out at the water and the holding him in my hands I knew he was still here, I knew he was still mine"
"I need him not becuse he helps me win, but because I love him.
I can't imagine my life withoutn him, and I realizied with my heart beathing fast and no one to find him. I realized it was him. It was never about supertistion it was about me just being with him,
As my heart beats with his, I know that our souls are intertwined I need him, I love him"
I want that type of desperation and need . I don't want to see the same character suffer again and again I need him to change.