Self promo (pls read my fanfictipn and give me constructive criticism)

Okay guys, I've began a House MD fanfiction called ''Amnesia was her name'' and its about House overdosing and when he wakes up he forgets everybody he's ever known. my goal is atleast 1k words per chapter.
But im still really new to writing so id love any advice/constructive criticism from anyone who likes to write.

It's on quotev, my user is sillybilly17 or ''Wilson my Beloved.''
Check it out!! (please, id really super appreciate it)