something is missing

reigen's left butt cheek December 23, 2023 11:21 am

like this has potential but i feel like im missing something. is it the writing? i feel like it is

Responses
    Seph December 23, 2023 2:10 pm

    Conflict and action. The sex is a bit tedious that it makes you lowkey forget the entire basis of the story tbh

    Çayestnousyest December 23, 2023 2:18 pm
    Conflict and action. The sex is a bit tedious that it makes you lowkey forget the entire basis of the story tbh Seph

    Exactly

    reigen's left butt cheek December 23, 2023 2:47 pm
    Conflict and action. The sex is a bit tedious that it makes you lowkey forget the entire basis of the story tbh Seph

    the conflict is there. there's also a little bit of action. it's just that this is a problem with a lot of yaoi / sex focused story. the sex just happens because of it? it's not a result of something brewing or showing any sign that it will effecting something. like you can take out the sex scene and it won't effecting the plot so it just makes it so bland? it kinda disturb any point the author wants to say. ig it's ashame, bcs at first the plot looks pretty intriguing.

    Seph December 23, 2023 4:36 pm
    the conflict is there. there's also a little bit of action. it's just that this is a problem with a lot of yaoi / sex focused story. the sex just happens because of it? it's not a result of something brewing or... reigen's left butt cheek

    Oh I forgot to add more in front of conflict and action LOLL but yeah a lot of the sex scenes aren’t even remotely connected to the plot at all so it just seems like fillers

    reigen's left butt cheek December 23, 2023 5:20 pm
    Oh I forgot to add more in front of conflict and action LOLL but yeah a lot of the sex scenes aren’t even remotely connected to the plot at all so it just seems like fillers Seph

    yeah exactly. also didn't realize you are THE seph. thank you for uploading girlie

    Seph December 23, 2023 5:26 pm
    yeah exactly. also didn't realize you are THE seph. thank you for uploading girlie reigen's left butt cheek

    LOLL no problem at all!! I like to read the topics sometimes especially on the stuff I upload to help people understand or any questions they might have

    AWinterWonderLand December 24, 2023 1:49 pm
    the conflict is there. there's also a little bit of action. it's just that this is a problem with a lot of yaoi / sex focused story. the sex just happens because of it? it's not a result of something brewing or... reigen's left butt cheek

    So far there's no plot.