and i dont even mean the art cus i can bear w generic & stiff pixels, it's the pacing that needs to be improved me thinks.
i guess like i don't get why ml is clinging to mc?? like ik he's a pretty boy and he cries a lot cus he's mentally fucked and exhausted but that can't just be it?? (although this isn't really a good critique cause the story isn't even halfway done yet i'm just plenty confused and at the same time just taking shit at face value)
I feel as thought everything’s happening so slow mann. USUALLYY there would be a dumb abstract plan or some type of defiance from the MC but realistically would u even attempt to flee from a guy who can give rid of you at any moment? The Mc is rightfully shitting himself at every moment . But I’m reading for the toxic brain rot so I’m not complaining ╮(￣▽￣)╭
ive seen my share of stories like these but this one has to go to the "switching my brain off if i read this" department cus everything's too fast like i wish the story was executed a little bit better