For me, it’s because it ended up being a demon like entity that doesn’t have a reason behind its toxicity to get fleshed out. Gave it the extra creep factor. At least with Killing Stalking, there was the whole deep dive into why their mental states were sooooooo messed up (that was a 5 star one for me).
tbh an entity, like a demon or something similar, is quite boring and uninteresting if it doesn't have a backstory or reason for its actions. When there's no background, it just makes me think the entity is a plain psychopath incapable of loving someone, they just seem unable to truly care about anyone and just want to play games. While I don't rlly care but I really prefer when the story gives a reasonable backstory, This way, I can understand the character's motivations and how they developed.
the mc is also a problem. They act like an npc bc their choices are so consistently foolish. Reading this story lowk confusing, The writing feels messy, like the author was too tired to focus. It's as though you keep falling asleep for a second and then suddenly waking up. the mc is lacking of inner monologue yk what im tryna say? it's badly written
Agreed! Yeah, I feel like this was a bit more of a horror twist for me because of the lack or backstory/reasoning behind the unhinged behavior. And the MC was super messy since they kept doing all the segments of him having 0 recollection of what happened since he was forced to sleep or just completely out of it. I kinda blame that a lot for why he couldn’t even figure out wth was going on well enough to figure out what to do. Plus it sucks that he realized there was an issue when he was a kid and then just went with it for a couple years to feed his ego. Also wish we got a better feel for how the family dynamic was pre dream child coming to the real world.
As a horror type smut short, I’m alright with it tho, so I’m just glad it didn’t go longer with this type of development.
i love fucked-up BL stories so much, but this one is lacking of details