The grammar needs work, there are many parts that are hard to read because they make no since. But the story is still good. However in chapter 3, I feel like there was something missing.
Same grammar seemed a bit off it wasn't really understandable for me
It feels like it was rushed and thrown together
The grammar needs work, there are many parts that are hard to read because they make no since. But the story is still good. However in chapter 3, I feel like there was something missing.