Don’t get me wrong this is very cute and fluffy— But for some reason it did nothing fo...

Uchan September 24, 2019 1:09 pm

Don’t get me wrong this is very cute and fluffy—
But for some reason it did nothing for me... I’m not sure why.

Responses
    Rania September 24, 2019 3:52 pm

    I don't want to be rude to the author, but it lacks emotion ... it should be longer ... describing how he fell in love, why he decided to have the baby, how the pregnancy was all by himself, how raising his child was (not just one page but more explicit) ... and the seme, i can't seem to figure him out ... i gues we need to wait ... i think overall it's too short

    torride September 24, 2019 5:02 pm
    I don't want to be rude to the author, but it lacks emotion ... it should be longer ... describing how he fell in love, why he decided to have the baby, how the pregnancy was all by himself, how raising his chi... Rania

    you're right. the characters are one dimensional despite the backstory. the good back story was when they slept together and the uke ran away, but after that, the flashbacks aren't pulling me in because the uke is just pining over the seme from afar and it doesn't give justice to the good drawing. the story in itself missed the mark after the seme found out he has a kid.

    Rania September 24, 2019 5:06 pm
    you're right. the characters are one dimensional despite the backstory. the good back story was when they slept together and the uke ran away, but after that, the flashbacks aren't pulling me in because the uke... torride

    Yeah the drawing is very pretty

    MrsHatake September 26, 2019 10:43 am

    Everything is too soft. Colours, edges, their personalities and conversations. It's all aesthetically pleasing, but not story wise. It lacks depth, its like they are constantly tip toeing around each other.
    Also, I dont really find it cute when they make a child talk like a grown up.

    raindragon January 21, 2020 4:57 pm
    Everything is too soft. Colours, edges, their personalities and conversations. It's all aesthetically pleasing, but not story wise. It lacks depth, its like they are constantly tip toeing around each other. Als... MrsHatake

    I agree about making children way too grownup sounding, as if a four year old could discuss relationship issues.
    for the rest, I think it's lovely and it fascinates me still