Bad writing

Fairy April 22, 2020 4:58 am

I'm so curious as to how to author will develop and end this story. It's already shit straight from the beginning.

It starts off so sudenly as well, we're just thrown into this break up without even knowing any of the characters and honestly it all felt so rushed.

Also, white hair dude seems like a selfish asshole and I don't see how he's the MC from the way this is written. Idk what kind of story this will be yet though, but I know I'll dislike it :/

Responses
    Happyface143 April 22, 2020 5:14 am

    I was confused about that too. He supposed to be the mc but he the one with the less screen time like huh?!? At least don't make it so obvious that he going end up with the ex bf (the real mc lol).

    Happyface143 April 22, 2020 5:20 am
    I was confused about that too. He supposed to be the mc but he the one with the less screen time like huh?!? At least don't make it so obvious that he going end up with the ex bf (the real mc lol). Happyface143

    Ok was wrong about what I said but the story is still bad lol

    Evankhell April 22, 2020 5:29 am

    Don't worry, I have read the raws and it will shit till the end. Shitty ending, shitty uke, shitty uke next boyfriend. The only good thing in this story is the second couple who should have their own story because they're so cute and great together. The second couple should have been the main couple from the beginning. The uke from the second couple is the uke's friend.