Why is the translated communication so awkward?

i think it's because i focused more on trying to translate it rather than make it sound like they're talking normally to each other, i'll try to do better next time, ty for the tips!! i hope it doesn't make u not want to read it tho :*(

No, thank you for the free content. I get an idea of what they are saying, so don't take what I said in a bad way. Just take your time
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