meh, just another ''I raped you because Im sad and lonely'' plot, nothing new to the table...

Dokidokita September 29, 2020 10:48 pm

meh, just another ''I raped you because Im sad and lonely'' plot, nothing new to the table ╮( ̄▽ ̄)╭

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    Jayjay September 30, 2020 8:07 am

    Yep... the progression could've used some better pacing. His change of heart was so sudden it gave me whiplash. Perhaps some juxtaposition of the mother's suicide with the mc's own apparent death, in the thoughts of the seme, would have helped to make that moment where he finally "realizes his mistakes" a lot more believable.

    Dokidokita October 1, 2020 12:33 am
    Yep... the progression could've used some better pacing. His change of heart was so sudden it gave me whiplash. Perhaps some juxtaposition of the mother's suicide with the mc's own apparent death, in the though... Jayjay

    ikr, he tells mc his sob story and suddenly everything is okay and oh he's so adorable...