To the translator/uploader: Thank you for your hard work translating! I'm really grateful to be able to read it. I get the general meaning of most things, and can make sense of most of the stuff. I'm looking forward to seeing the rest of the chapters!
I liked this webtoon, but rereading it again I see the reason why I kept it out of my mind until now - it was just too short. It was funny, it was simple, but full of emotion, characters are pretty memorable - but it's too short. At least we got the confession + they're together now, plus he's finally confronted his older brother with regards to the truth.
Ch. 3 pg. 29.
He removed his shirt, but in the next panel he wore it again. Then on the next page, he doesn't have a shirt on again. I couldn't focus on the rest of the chapter after that. I mean, I've seen inverted hands and feet (right hand on left arm, left foot on right leg) , and I'm not usually too observant, but I was definitely caught off guard by this one.
It's not the main focus but I'm glad they invited the black haired girl to the wedding. They weren't very close and there's persistent misunderstandings, but it made all of them happy with her invitation and attendance.
Story is filled with emotion and it's not too hard to see the characters' motivations, but it does feel a bit incomplete. There are elements that stick out and feel unnatural to an otherwise smooth path of a story, and I feel like there should have been more chapters, at least expanding a bit on things.
-I feel like the hurtful statement Mamoru said as a kid was simply brushed under a rug after it was overshadowed by what his mom had said. That leads me to think that it was there to mislead Mamoru into thinking all these years that it might've been the reason why Kana changed so much, because if he rejected him gently, or even if he had accepted Kana's feelings, Kana would still think back on what Mamoru's mom had said, and feel guilty, therefore there's no big reason for him to say those things to drive the plot other than to make him feel guilty.
-On that note, they also didn't further address what's going on in Kana's family apart from that one flashback. Surely they've noticed when he changed not only his appearance, but also stayed out late and misbehaved as a junior high student.
As it is, it's surprising that he changed a bit in college. It's like their appearance was only to make the readers know that "Kana's backed into a corner, with no family, and no friends." and nothing else.
-What about the rumors of Kana's supposed older girlfriend? Why not expand a little bit more onto his friends and junior high years? This time, their existence was there to highlight Kana's life without Mamoru, but in spite of their limited appearance they're not completely off-putting in contrast to the two other things that makes the story feel incomplete, like simply tacked elements. As such, with the help of presumption based on similar stories, and inferrences, one can pretty much integrate them better into the story and somewhat complete that scene of him in junior high school.
But this is just what I might think, I could be wrong, although I think anyone who reads this and spends a while pondering would notice that even disregarding these elements, the story feels a bit incomplete for starting things but not ending them, leading to loose ends everywhere. As such, since the story is completed, if there is to be no sequel nor side story addressing the incomplete parts, one may only presume with implications strewn about, and properly tie the elements of the story together.
Chii gets overwhelmed by Nishiki's actions and gets mad/runs away, Nishiki doesn't explain, and Chii later finds out more and learns that there's more to Nishiki's actions.
Really a short and cute story, and my favorite part is always the drawings of the snake and mouse at the back of Chii and Nishiki. Especially the snake, because for the most part the mouse is usually surprised/horrified. It appears that they, too, are aware of these characteristics, hence why Chii called him a reptile and views him as a snake (views herself and her family as mice), and Nishiki appears to see Chii as like a mouse (I don't know if he's aware of himself being snake-like.)
Considering the difference in classes, there may be some trouble afoot for the couple in the future, but I feel like they're going to be just fine.
It's pretty cute, but I'm not too fond of Commander's slight arrogance.
Guess that's one of the things Alexei grew to like, though.
Also, while I understand his concerns of Alexei simply beig swept around or being someone who is seemingly too carefree, I think it's almost ridiculous how he didn't even want Alexei to meet with his family and friends until Alexei reasons with him - he's not even familiar with his family, and already he views them in a negative manner, with the whole "I own Alexei now" as his main reason.
Still, it's supposed to be a cute and sweet story, and Alexei is such a lovable and beautiful-looking character, plus I'm definitely thinking too much about that bit, being that it's supposed to be lighthearted, so it's just a slight dissatisfaction on my part, I suppose.
I feel the same way, I mean I do love a possesive seme but not like this..
I couldn't help but cry a little when I read Ch. 29. After arriving in this world, he is immediately rejected and pushed off a ledge, then hurled insults at, and finally "disposed" of.
In such a painful, miserable way, too... the first thing he sees is the disappointment of his summoner, and the last thing he sees is the departing figure of his resuscitator after rejecting him thoroughly - all in a span of possibly 10 minutes or less. How helpless had he felt as they were discussing his fate? When he kneeled at the cold marble floor, awaiting his "disposal", what was he thinking? Was he resenting his resuscitator? Was he hating himself? Was he insulting his fate? It just... I had to stop reading for a bit after that moment, before Meltier did the explaining.
As someone who did play a gacha game, I immediately thought of the characters I don't use anymore or never used at all. I always thought of it as simply them taking a rest, somewhere out there, doing their own stuff until we call for them. At least they thrive even as "copies" of the original people. This "game" is so brutal and made me feel miserable. It makes me rethink a lot of things and made me do some reflecting. If I didn't have things to do, I would've lied down and pondered about it a bit more.
Due to how nice the art is and how intrigued I am of the story, I searched for spoilers and learned that the Author had deleted the web novel, but focuses on light novel. According to some people, light novel is up to Vol.5.
And I don't know whether I'll ever get access to that, so I really hope to continue reading this.
I think Asagi is also kind of a little warped.
For one, even if he almost doesn't have any friends, he's basically unable to go anywhere, ever, and he can never talk to people outside, unless permitted. At first one understands its for the contract, but later on, even when finding out the truth (and even after being told that he could break the contract and still have help for Aoi), he still chooses to stick around - I guess it's all in Kaname's predictions, seeing as I doubt he'd let him go at all. He's just giving Asagi the illusion of choice, to let him feel a little more free. That tidbit about him liking him, wanting to help him, and that he feels "caged" definitely contributed into winning Asagi over. But even then, wouldn't he at least have the contract broken, and just visit Kaname or date him normally? Also, not only does he never mention his best friend, he also seems to have decided to completely give up on ever talking to him again.
Seeing as how big his friend is supposed to be for him, you'd at least expect him to voice concerns about that guy, or ask for permission as according to contract. Not that Kaname would easily allow it, but I feel like if he got to learn the truth about his best friend, and who the true traitor is, as well as get to talk to him afterwards one last time, I think that would definitely provide a bit of closure for him.
And as far as I can see, the betrayal bit isn't completely cleared. Asagi never learned who the true culprit was, and Kaname didn't expand on it or properly clear his name. He just indirectly appealed to Asagi and said he wanted to start anew. Maybe the "clearance" of his name is simply that he completely denies being the traitor, barely any additional explanation needed. So maybe, in Kaname's mind, even if he did reveal who the true culprit is, Asagi might forgive his best friend and even decide to reconcile, thinking, "Ah, this guy just likes me, that's why", considering he seemed to accept Kaname's words like that. Or perhaps, it still lingers in Kaname's mind, that Asagi would choose to trust that guy over him. In that case, the current path in the story is the only one he thought is best - crush the other guy's hopes and spirit and guard the complete truth from Asagi, only letting him see pretty things. Because maybe, like before, he wouldn't be trusted.