
This story is just so weirdly put together. I liked it, but at times the story seemed disjointed. I feel like we don't see enough bonding with the characters and things just happen. At times the story seems to jump from one event to another. Also I feel like the story can't decide if it wants to be a serious drama or a breaking the forth wall comedy. It wasn't horrible, but i can see how it can leave some confused.
This had such great potential to be a series. I'm sad there aren't more chapters. The story sets it up for more. More than a self contained one shot this felt like a first chapter of a longer series.